Hello, My name is Yoonna Jin. I'm from Korea known as last divided country nowadays. And I love read books, watch movies and do voluntary work. I have been doing voluntary work 3 months and it is about teaching Korean for internationals. I'm really into it. And I like expanding my horizon as well, I learn and develop myself by meet people. People has their own color and point of view, so whenever talking with other people I can feel it and I can look the world differently, I think it is the most interest things when you meet someone and talking with someone. However, I'm kind of between introvert and extrovert person, sometimes it takes too much energy from me, so it makes me feel tired a little bit. That's why I really need my own private time, otherwise, I will be like a flubber.
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Previous Sentence: I love read books, watch movies and do voluntary work.
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with other people. I can feel it and look the world differently.
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sometimes it takes too much energy for me, so it makes me feel tired a little bit.
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Sometimes, it takes too much energy from me, so it makes me feel a little bit tired.
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Previous Sentence: That’s why I really need my own private time, otherwise, I will be a flubber.
Better Sentence: That’s why, I really need my own private time. Otherwise, I will be a flubber.
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Introduction of Myself
Hello! My name is Yoonn Jin. I’m from Korea known from as the last divided country nowadays. I love reading books, watching movies, and doing voluntary works. I have been doing voluntary work for three months and it is about teaching Korean language for internationals.I’m really into it. I like expanding my horizons as well, and learn to develop myself by meeting people. People have different races and views, so whenever I’m speaking with other people, I can feel them and look at the world differently.I think it is the most interesting experience when you meet and speak with people. Sometimes, it takes too much energy from me, so it makes me feel a little bit tired.
However, I am between an introvert and extrovert person. Sometimes,
It takes too much energy from me, So it makes me feel a little bit tired. That’s why, I need my own private time. Otherwise, I will be a flubber.
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