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제 목	Introduction of my family
교정강사	tess
등록일	2022-06-25
작성글	Our family includes my mother, younger sister and myself. My mother is reliable and she never delay what she have to do. But If she has a disadvantage, it would be that she's terrible at cooking. She often cooks in my house but that looks not good. So I started cooking since I was young. I'm not good at cooking just like my mother though but I think I can cook better than her. My younger sister is such a cute girl but She and me personality are opposite. So she fights with me very often but she and me very simple, we reconcile quickly. Recently I'm worried about she is stuck on cell phone all the time. Maybe she is so addicted to cell phone.
교정내용	Introduction of my family Our family includes my mother, younger sister and myself. My mother is reliable and she never delay what she have to do. But If she has a disadvantage, it would be that she's terrible at cooking. She often cooks in my house but that looks not good. So I started cooking since I was young. I'm not good at cooking just like my mother though but I think I can cook better than her. My younger sister is such a cute girl but She and me personality are opposite. So she fights with me very often but she and me very simple, we reconcile quickly. Recently I'm worried about she is stuck on cell phone all the time. Maybe she is so addicted to cell phone. CORRECTIONS: Title: Introduction of my family Better: My Family WW AC Previous Sentence: → My family includes my mother, younger sister and myself. Better Sentence: My family consists of my mother, younger sister and, myself. AC WW WW Previous Sentence: My mother is reliable and she never delay what she have to do. Better Sentence: My mother is reliable and she never delays what she has to do. Red AP NR Previous Sentence: But she has a disadvantage, it would be that she’s terrible at cooking. Better Sentence: But she has the weakness too. She’s terrible at cooking. WW AC WW Red AC WW Previous Sentence: She often cooks in my house but that looks not good. So I started cooking since I was young. Better Sentence: She often cooks in our house, but it looks awful. I have started cooking since I was young. Red WW Previous Sentence: I’m not good at cooking just like my mother though I can cook better than her. Better Sentence: I’m not a good cook just like my mother, but I can cook better than her. AC Red Previous Sentence: My younger sister is such a cute girl but she and me personality are opposite. Better Sentence: My younger sister is such a cute girl, but our personalities are opposite. AC Red NR Previous Sentence: So she fights with me very often but she and me very simple, we reconcile quickly. Better Sentence: So she fights with me very often but we simple reconcile quickly. AC WW/PRON V WSP AC Previous Sentence: Recently I’m worried about she is stuck on the cell phone all the time. Maybe she is Red /PRON addicted to cell phone. Better Sentence: Recently, I’m worried about her. She is stuck on using the cellphone all day. Maybe, she is addicted to it. REVISED: My Family My family consists of my mother, younger sister and myself. My mother is reliable, and she never delays what she has to do. But she has the weakness too. She is terrible at cooking. She often cooks in our house, but it looks awful. So, I have started cooking since I was young. I’m not a good cook just like my mother, but I can cook better than her. My younger sister is such a cute girl, but our personalities are opposite. So, she fights with me very often, but we simple reconcile quickly. Recently, I’m worried about her. She is stuck on using the cellphone all the time. Maybe, she is addicted to it. LEGEND: Red Remove/omit SF Sentence Fragment Lower Change the letter(s) to small letter(s) Change the letter(s) to big letter(s) FR Wrong word order → Indent the sentence NR No error/mistake WB Wrong abbreviation ↗ Start a new paragraph # Space needed × Remove a space ∽ Transpose (change the position of the word) WSP Wrong spelling AP Add a period (.) AC Add a comma (,) AE Add an exclamation point (!) AQM Add a question mark (?) AAP Add an apostrophe (‘) + PL Change to Plural form WWF Wrong word form WW Wrong word WPU Wrong pronoun usage RO Run-on (Fused Sentence) S Subject Needed V Verb needed P Preposition needed C Conjunction needed A Article needed PRON Add Pronoun ADV Add Adverb AN Add Noun MP Misused Preposition // Faulty Parallelism EDITED BY: TESS