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1. korea president is miss.Park. she is the first woman president in korea. [president]

CORRECTION:  Miss Park Gun Hye is Korea's President. She is the first female president in our country.

2. I think the most important thing in English is vocabulary. And I am feeling difficulty to memorize the vocabulary.

CORRECTION: ​I think the most important thing in English is vocabulary​ but it's  hard for me to memorize it.

​3. Korea has a lot of financial debts. so Now, the government is raising taxes gradually. because they have to secure tax revenues.

4. I think it's difficult to keep the world peace, because there are many problems in this world such as war.

​5. My most remember thing is 100 kilometer march when I was serving in the army. it was very
    terrible experience. because we walked for 24 hours.

CORRECTION:  My most unforgettable experience was in the army service. That time we needed to march for 100 kilometers in 24 hours. That was a terrible experience for me.