Legend:
Red Remove/omit
R Wrong word order
→ Indent the sentence.
∽ Transpose (change the position of the word)
NR No error/mistake
AP Add a period (.)
WW Wrong word
A Article needed
CORRECTIONS
→ I am in college and (I) major in dental hygiene. My college life is the second time. (This is my second
(AC) (A)
time in college(,) So I am much older than (the) other students. (Even so,) I think I am young at my heart.
↗ I have never been to America before. But I hope that I will (WW) (could) go to America to study English before (it's) too late. So I gave 'hit the world program in my college' ∽ a try . At the first time, I hesitated to apply for the program because of my age. (NR) However, I didn't want to regret not to give it a try. (NR) Finally,my hope came true. Even though it is (going to be) a short stay in America, I (am positive that I) will enjoy my time, (there) AP(.) (I will) exert my endeavor(WW) (effort) in studying English, specially(WS) (especially) (in) speaking English, and (will) take(WW) (do) a (lot of) sight-seeing as much as I can. Before stopping the internet (I end), I would like to thank for those who gave me a chance. (Better: Before I end/finish, I would like to express my gratitude to everyone who has given me the chance to experience this.)
REVISED:
I am in college and I major in dental hygiene. This is my second time in college, so I am much older than the other students. Even so, I think I am young at heart.
I have never been to America before, but I hope that I could go to America to study English before it’s too late. So I gave 'hit the world program in my college' a try. At first, I hesitated to apply for the program because of my age. However, I didn't want to regret not to give it a try. Finally, my hope came true. Even though it is going to be a short stay in America, I am positive that I will enjoy my time there. I will exert my effort in studying English, especially in speaking, and will do a lot of sightseeing as much as I can. Before I end/finish, I would like to express my gratitude to everyone who has given me the chance to experience this.
Edited by Teacher Eartha
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