STUDENTS WRITING: 

 finally you guys tell us the reason about my baggage didnt arrive. it was our fault so we should be pay transport fee from brisbane to melborne. because we already leaving sydeny. anyway we can get our missing baggage safety in melborne. but we should have some paper to proof about this situation is our fault(jongyoung park) and should pay transport fee. because we want to charge insurance money in korea. so you guys check this situation instantly please answer my request.  ​

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CORRECTIONS:

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Previous sentence: finally you guys tell us the reason about my baggage didnt arrive. ​

Correct Sentence: ​Finally, you guys tell us the reason about why my baggage didn't arrive.

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Previous sentence: it was our fault so we should be pay transport fee from brisbane to melborne.​ because we already leaving sydeny. anyway we can get our missing baggage safety in melborne.​

Correct Sentence: It was our fault, so we should pay the transport fee from Brisbane to ​Melbourne because we are already leaving Sydney. Anyway, we can get our missing baggage safety in Melbourne.​​

Previous sentence: but we should have some paper to proof about this situation is our fault(jongyoung park) and should pay transport fee^. ​because we want to charge insurance money in korea. ​

Correct Sentence:But we should have some paper to proof about this situation is our fault(Jongyoung Park) and should pay the transport fee because we want to charge using the insurance money in Korea​.

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Previous sentence: so you guys check this situation instantly please answer my request.  ​​

Correct Sentence: ​So you guys please check this situation instantly  and answer my request.  ​​

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REVISED WRITING:

 ​Finally, you guys tell us the reason about why my baggage didn't arrive.​ It was our fault, so we should pay the transport fee from Brisbane to ​Melbourne because we are already leaving Sydney. Anyway, we can get our missing baggage safety in Melbourne.​​​But we should have some paper to proof about this situation is our fault(Jongyoung Park) and should pay the transport fee because we want to charge using the insurance money in Korea​​.So you guys please check this situation instantly  and answer my request.  ​​

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Legend:

            = Remove/omit the red colored part.

           = Sentence Fragment   

            = Change the letter(s) to small letter(s).

            = Change the letter(s) to big letter(s).

            = Wrong word order

→         = Indent the sentence.  

​NR        = No error/mistake

WB       = Wrong abbreviation

↗        = Start a new paragraph

#           = Space needed

×​           = Remove a space​

∽​          = Transpose (change the position of the word) 

WSP      = Wrong spelling

AP         = Add a period (.)

AC         = Add a comma (,)

AE         = Add an exclamation point (!)

AQM      = Add an question Mark (?)

AAP       = Add an apostrophe (‘)

OP         = Open a parenthesis [(]

CP         = Close a parenthesis [)]

SL      = Change to Singular form

PL         = Change to Plural form

WF        = Wrong word form

WW        = Wrong word

WPU      = Wrong pronoun usage

N        = Noun needed

PR    ​     =Pronoun needed

RO         = Run-on (Fused Sentence)

S           = Subject Needed

V           = Verb needed

AV         = Adverb needed

AD      =Adjective needed

P           = Preposition needed

C           = Conjunction needed

A           = Article needed

MP         = Misused Preposition

//          = Faulty Parallelism  

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