Student #790      kyh168

2^nd Diary

Student’s Writing:

After examination, I had a little party with my friend.

I ate delicious food and drink an alcohol.

As soon as we finished the exam, it was a summer vacation.

I take first summer vacation as a college student.

I am so excited.

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Corrections:

                            A​

Previous Sentence:  After examination, I had a little party with my friend.

Better Sentence:    After the examination, I had a little party with my friend.

                         WW​                            WF​ 

Previous Sentence:  I ate delicious food and drink an alcohol.

Better Sentence:    I eat delicious food and drink some alcohol.

Previous Sentence:  As soon as we finished the exam, it was a summer vacation.

Better Sentence:    As soon as the exam is over summer vacation will start.

Previous Sentence:  I take first summer vacation as a college student.

Better Sentence:    It’s my first summer vacation as a college student.

Previous Sentence: I am so excited.

Better Sentence:   NR

REVISED:

After the examination, I had a little party with my friend.

I eat delicious food and drink some alcohol.

As soon as the exam is over summer vacation will start.

It’s my first summer vacation as a college student.

I am so excited. 

Legend:

​       = Remove/omit the red colored part.

 ​     = Sentence Fragment   

   ​    = Change the letter(s) to small letter(s).

         =  Change the letter(s) to big letter(s).

         = Wrong word order

→        = Indent the sentence.  

NR       = No error/mistake

WB      = Wrong abbreviation

↗       = Start a new paragraph

#        = Space needed

×​       = Remove a space​

∽​       = Transpose (change the position of the word) 

WSP    = Wrong spelling

AP      = Add a period (.)

AC      = Add a comma (,)

AE       = Add an exclamation point (!)

AQM    = Add an question Mark (?)

AAP     = Add an apostrophe (‘)

OP      = Open a parenthesis [(]

CP      = Close a parenthesis [)]

PL      = Change to Plural form

WF      = Wrong word form

WW     = Wrong word

WPU    = Wrong pronoun usage

RO      = Run-on (Fused Sentence)

S        = Subject Needed

V        = Verb needed

P        = Preposition needed

C        = Conjunction needed

A        = Article needed

MP      = Misused Preposition

//       = Faulty Parallelism 

Corrected by: Joy