STUDENTS WRITING:
Hello. My name is Jisoo Woo. Who am I, first I attach importance to happiness. What ever I do I must feel happy. That is not to say that I should continue to succeed. Even if it fails I have to gain something what make me happy. Happiness is a source of life. Next, I like to immerse myself in my work. For example I like teaching someone like Kindergarten student . So I applied for infant education and I study hard more than anyone else. Finally, I like to talk to my friends.
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CORRECTIONS:
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Previous sentence: Hello. My name is Jisoo Woo.
Correct Sentence: Hello, my name is Jisoo Woo.
AQM AC WW
Previous sentence: Who am I, first I attach importance to happiness.
Correct Sentence: Who am I? First, I put importance to happiness.
X AC
Previous sentence: What ever I do I must feel happy.
Correct Sentence: Whatever I do, I must feel happy.
WW
Previous sentence: That is not to say that I should continue to succeed.
Correct Sentence: I’m not saying that I should continue to succeed.
WPU PL AC SL
Previous sentence: Even if it fails I have to gain something what make me happy.
Correct Sentence: Even if I fail, I have to gain something what makes me happy.
NR
Previous sentence: Happiness is a source of life.
Correct Sentence: Happiness is a source of life.
Previous sentence: Next, I like to immerse myself in my work.
Correct Sentence: Next, I like to immerse myself in my work.
AC X
Previous sentence: For example I like teaching someone like Kindergarten student .
Correct Sentence: For example, I like teaching someone like Kindergarten student.
Previous sentence: So I applied for infant education and I study hard more than anyone else.
Correct Sentence: So, I applied for Infant Education and I study hard more than anyone else.
Previous sentence: Finally, I like to talk to my friends.
Correct Sentence: Finally, I like to talk to my friends.
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REVISED WRITING:
Hello, my name is Jisoo Woo.Who am I? First, I put importance to happiness. Whatever I do, I must feel happy. I’m not saying that I should continue to succeed. Even if I fail, I have to gain something what makes me happy. Happiness is a source of life. Next, I like to immerse myself in my work. For example, I like teaching someone like Kindergarten student. So, I applied for Infant Education and I study hard more than anyone else. Finally, I like to talk to my friends.
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→ = Indent the sentence.
NR = No error/mistake
WB = Wrong abbreviation
↗ = Start a new paragraph
# = Space needed
× = Remove a space
∽ = Transpose (change the position of the word)
^ = Add word/sentences
WSP = Wrong spelling
AP = Add a period (.)
AC = Add a comma (,)
AE = Add an exclamation point (!)
AQM = Add an question Mark (?)
AAP = Add an apostrophe (‘)
OP = Open a parenthesis [(]
CP = Close a parenthesis [)]
SL = Change to Singular form
PL = Change to Plural form
WF = Wrong word form
WW = Wrong word
WPU = Wrong pronoun usage
N = Noun needed
PR =Pronoun needed
RO = Run-on (Fused Sentence)
S = Subject Needed
V = Verb needed
AV = Adverb needed
AD =Adjective needed
P = Preposition needed
C = Conjunction needed
A = Article needed
MP = Misused Preposition
// = Faulty Parallelism
Edited by Quenny
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