I went to the kindergarden as an apprentice. In there I talk with student and ate lunch. When I go to the kindergarden I feel happy so much and think it is true happiness. But sometimes I talk to student with an angry look. Today students fool around brushing teeth. So I talked witthh an angry look. Then one student look so sad. So I feeled 'a! I had a mistake to students.' Because giving right hand is good, but feeling shame is not good. If felt shame, will gain a wound. In conclusion I thought when give hand someone I have to find right way. ​

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CORRECTIONS:

                                                 WSP               AC                 A         P PR

Previous sentence: I went to the kindergarden as an apprentice. In there I talk with student and ate lunch.​

Correct Sentence: I went to the Kindergarten as an apprentice. In there, I talk with the student and ate lunch with them.

                                                WSP                       P          A

Previous sentence: When I go to the kindergarden I feel happy so much and think it is true happiness.​

Correct Sentence: When I go to the kindergarten I feel I’m very  happy and I think it is a true happiness.​

                                                AC     

Previous sentence: But sometimes I talk to student with an angry look.​

Correct Sentence: But sometimes, I talk to student with an angry look.​

                                      AC      V     PR          AC       WSP

Previous sentence: Today students fool around brushing teeth. So I talked witthh an angry look.​

Correct Sentence: Today, students are fool around brushing their teeth. So, I talked with an angry look.​

                           P A                  AC  WF              P                            

Previous sentence: Then one student look so sad. So I feeled 'a! I had a mistake to students.​ 

Correct Sentence:​Then one of the student look so sad. So, I felt 'a! I had a mistake to the students.​

                            A           

Previous sentence: Because giving right hand is good, but feeling shame is not good.​

Correct Sentence: ​Because giving a right hand is good, but feeling shame is not good.​

                                                             AC                            A      P                       A

Previous sentence: If felt shame, will gain a wound. In conclusion I thought when give hand someone I have to find right way. ​​

Correct Sentence: ​If felt shame, will gain a wound. In conclusion, I thought when give a hand to someone I have to find the right way. ​​

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REVISED WRITING:

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Legend:

            = Remove/omit the red colored part.

           = Sentence Fragment   

            = Change the letter(s) to small letter(s).

            = Change the letter(s) to big letter(s).

            = Wrong word order

→         = Indent the sentence.  

​NR        = No error/mistake

WB       = Wrong abbreviation

↗        = Start a new paragraph

#           = Space needed

×​           = Remove a space​

∽​          = Transpose (change the position of the word) 

WSP      = Wrong spelling

AP         = Add a period (.)

AC         = Add a comma (,)

AE         = Add an exclamation point (!)

AQM      = Add an question Mark (?)

AAP       = Add an apostrophe (‘)

OP         = Open a parenthesis [(]

CP         = Close a parenthesis [)]

SL      = Change to Singular form

PL         = Change to Plural form

WF        = Wrong word form

WW        = Wrong word

WPU      = Wrong pronoun usage

N        = Noun needed

PR    ​     =Pronoun needed

RO         = Run-on (Fused Sentence)

S           = Subject Needed

V           = Verb needed

AV         = Adverb needed

AD      =Adjective needed

P           = Preposition needed

C           = Conjunction needed

A           = Article needed

MP         = Misused Preposition

//          = Faulty Parallelism  

Edited by Quenny